Has a reviewer pointed out that your manuscript is verbose, wordy, WAY too long, or that you need to cut?
Here 6 strategies to address this feedback:
1. Cut repetitive sentences
2. Combine similar sentences
3. Remove expletive constructions
4. Eliminate intensifiers/modifiers
5. Identify grouped synonyms
6. Remove yourself
How do you implement each one? Let me explain.
1. Cut repetitive sentences – In a gist, every sentence should present unique and new information. If two or more sentences are similar, pick one and delete the others.
2. Combine similar sentences – Check if you used more than one sentence to say something that could have been said in one. Think of it as sentences that list similar items.
Original: Research data sources include qualitative interviews and
participant artifacts. While quantitative data consists of aptitude
tests and Likert scales.
Improved: The study incorporates qualitative (i.e., interviews,
artifacts) and quantitative data sources (i.e., aptitude tests, Likert
3. Identify grouped synonyms – Look for lists of words with similar meaning.
Original: Dentists and dental assistants recommend daily flossing.
Improved: Dental specialists recommend daily flossing.
4. Remove expletive constructions – Identify sentences that start with the following word combinations: «It is…» «There are…»
Original: There are 45 subjects who met study criteria.
Improved: Forty five subjects met study criteria.
5. Eliminate intensifiers/modifiers – Look out for these words and replace with terms that capture the desired emphasis: «very,» «utmost,» «really»
Original: It is of utmost important to pursue this line of research.
Improved: It is crucial to pursue this line of research.
6. Remove yourself – Look out for these phrases: «In my opinion,» «I believe»
Original: I believe that language cannot be removed from science
Improved: Language cannot be removed from science education.
You can hit CTRL + F in your keyboard to locate every instance of the phrases and words listed under #4, #5, and #6. I assure you starting with the simplest revision strategies will help you start to feel more in charge of your writing.
Then, you can move on to #1, #2, and #3 since they require that you actually read the piece sentence by sentence. I also recommend that you do this conciseness revision in multiple sessions and not just one sitting. Having a couple of productive revising sections will help boost your writing morale.
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